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Post by Trey_Vore on Aug 8, 2006 20:40:53 GMT -5
Yeah. Cut us some slack.
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Post by Belchic on Aug 8, 2006 22:38:25 GMT -5
I'm writing the final chapter. Jorb, if you hate it, tough.
Chapter 3 - Lucky and Two-Tone begin their date
That night, Mooch waited patiently outside the barn for one of two specific puppies. Eventually, they arrived, still camouflaged, still making no communications with Mooch. Mooch then caught attention to them.
Mooch: Hey, isn't that the same guy I saw earlier today? Hey, you!
Lucky looked at Mooch.
Mooch: Do I know you anywhere?
Lucky: Maybe, but do I know you?
Mooch: I know that voice!
Lucky: You guessed it!
Lucky threw off his facial disguise.
Mooch: LUCKY? WHA? HOW DID YOU...?
He then threw off the cloak.
Two-Tone: Surprised, aren't you, Mooch?
Mooch: TWO-TONE, HOW CAN YOU...?
Lucky: Beat it, Mooch...She's dancing with me...not you.
Mooch: Why you little flea bag! I think you're asking for a knuckle sandwich right now!
Before Mooch can even get near Lucky, Noggin and Belchic dropped in from out of nowhere, and Belchic let out the most humongous fart he's ever passed right in Mooch's face.
Mooch: AAAARRRGGH! OH, GOSH!
Belchic: Wiggity Wheeze! Who cut the cheese?
Mooch: AAAHH! YOU GOT BAD GAS UP MY NOSE!
Noggin: And my fist in your face!
Noggin socked Mooch in the face. As Noggin and Belchic continued to beat up Mooch, Lucky got off of Two-Tone's shoulders and escorted her into the barn.
Lucky: Come on, Two-Tone. There's a grrroomba with our name on it!
And so began their date.
THE END
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Post by hybridmisfit on Aug 8, 2006 23:19:51 GMT -5
nice twist ending ;D
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Post by monkey on Aug 9, 2006 0:49:39 GMT -5
I'm writing the final chapter. Jorb, if you hate it, tough. Heh, like me really, I didn't find it interesting at all really, however, to me, if he wants to write it, I aint stopping him. But seeing as he's finished, it doesn't matter in the slightest.
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Post by Belchic on Aug 9, 2006 2:17:41 GMT -5
Well, this isn't one of my true fanfics, just a remake on an episode. I personally had more fun writing "Pup and Down". My true fanfics capture a lot of essence of the series (unlike some fics on here...no offense).
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Post by Two-Tone on Aug 9, 2006 2:37:40 GMT -5
lol nice ending
I might make a few ep remakes myself sometime
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Post by LoneWanderer Raiden on Aug 9, 2006 7:29:57 GMT -5
Lol. Cool fic, Belchic. Nice job.
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Post by Belchic on Aug 9, 2006 12:01:45 GMT -5
I'm not going to continue doing stuff like this, I just chose to remake "Love Em and Flea Em" mainly because I disliked the fact that Mooch was so mean to Lucky in that episode and this seems to be the favorite episode on this board.
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Post by Littledipper on Aug 9, 2006 15:24:27 GMT -5
Good fic belchic i like how you farted in mooches face.
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Post by Deleted on Aug 9, 2006 15:32:56 GMT -5
this Jerb I thank its Tac because I know how he can copy and past and add on to post like this and he typs/talks like Tac to...I dont know for shire but I thank its Tac I beleave
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Post by LoneWanderer Raiden on Aug 9, 2006 15:47:28 GMT -5
this Jerb I thank its Tac because I know how he can copy and past and add on to post like this and he typs/talks like Tac to...I dont know for shire but I thank its Tac I beleave Slayer, I wouldn't assume anything so easily. He could be anybody despite how he types. Until then, don't accuse Tac. Just saying and now that that's been said, let's just leave this topic for reviews and nothing else, alright? Just saying.
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Post by Deleted on Aug 9, 2006 15:48:44 GMT -5
yes lets Tic-Tac Tac if you can see this....sorry man
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Post by Belchic on Aug 9, 2006 17:20:59 GMT -5
Sometimes, it's best to just watch what you say.
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Post by Trey_Vore on Aug 10, 2006 9:20:36 GMT -5
Hey, Belchic, nice job. I liked the reference that you made to your favorite pic that I sent you.
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Post by Deleted on Aug 10, 2006 12:00:21 GMT -5
thaty was good nice work
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