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Post by Raine Dearly on Sept 7, 2015 2:09:49 GMT -5
Melanie had left the party at Grutley to return to where she was seen by Raine in Devillage. She kept thinking how much the place had changed or stayed the same. Was the curse worse or the same or better. Most importantly did Rebecca already get out. Did she do what she said and help her people and many more thoughts in her head ran through.
Rebecca was in fact in trouble. Everyone was cursed hated her and wanted her head. Rebecca looked at the entrance of the place and said" oh man I can't believe how hard it is to escape.
Eventually Melanie reached and in fact Devillage new her as Melina the chef. She approached the gate and said " hey there Jacob remember me.?"
" Oh I remember Melina you left us here with your punk friends to root." Jacob said.
" Yes I know and I am here to make amends with that. I haven't seen you in what 3 months. So you are a guard now ha?" Melanie said.
" Yeah and the best one also. So may I ask. You have a great life ahead of you by you know been here and standing on this side of the gate. Something tells me that you want inside. Just one thing Mella what goes in never comes out. So what brings you back?" Jacob said.
" Simple I left something behind when I left the first time and that is Rebecca" Melanie said.
" Let's cut to the point Rebecca is the most hated thing here. You Melina are the most wanted here. So tell how you plan to get her out?" Jacob said.
Melanie paused and said " Easy you are coming out to." Melanie winking at him.
Jacobs face dropped and let her in. " Good luck." he said.
" Thanks Labrador guard we will be out in two days so be ready." Melanie said giving the thumbs up and walking in.
Jacob did the same and gave a sme.
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Post by Deleted on Sept 7, 2015 2:48:29 GMT -5
Raine.. there are several things wrong with this.
The curse makes everyone blissfully HAPPY. Why would they hate Rebecca?
The curse also allows the town to appear once every 100 years. How the heck can Melanie apparently just warp in and out without problems? How can Rebecca still even meet with her, since outside the town time is normal and she should probably be.. I don't know dead since 100 years would have to pass for DevilVille to appear?
Also, if Jarrod was in DevilVille, he would have fallen under the curse. Why does he appear to be perfectly aware of what's going on? He should be doped up happy and blissfully unaware of anything bad, or am I missing something?
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Post by Raine Dearly on Sept 7, 2015 3:25:47 GMT -5
Jarrod was never in Devillage he is referring to Lucky and Raine and all.
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Post by Raine Dearly on Sept 7, 2015 3:27:59 GMT -5
Besides it doesn't have to be exactly the same as it was. It is a story a fantasy story things can change. The curse will be answered.
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Post by babclayman on Sept 7, 2015 6:04:57 GMT -5
So, what you're claiming on the Continuity issues is; "What (You're) doing is wrong, (You) Know that (You're) doing it wrong, but (You're) still doing it?"
What can be awkward, on what you claim though, is that it is establish what the Rules are, in; "101 Dalmatians The Series". But, what you're trying here, I think Cadpig words it well with; 'Bend Reality Untl It Works For You".
As Mizan claims; The Curse is to make those in Devil Ville (That's what it's called, not "De Village") mindlssly happy, to make Judge Dimsdale Devil more miserabl by comparison, and to protct them from his dark nature. There can be ways, one can have it agains Rebecca, like; she try using a chicken on some, in the Town, but it makes them see that they're stck with Judge Dimsdale Devil, or something like that?
How is Melaine able to get to Devil Ville too? Like Mizan claims, the curse claims that it appears one day, evry one hundred years.
Also, isn' Spot the onl one, who remembers what happen, in the Episode (Though, it is possible, when she tries to kiss Lucky, it may have him remember)?
When it comes to writing, you do need to consider the continuity, as the readers will notice, and call you on it too. And, considering how many Continuity calls, you have the Dalmatians make, in Stories or an RP, it gives you more reason, to make sure that you have the correct Continuity. You can see, why you need to be consistnt, with the Continuity, can you?
I do have to question, have you ever seen the Episode; "Devil Age Elder", Raine?
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Post by Raine Dearly on Sept 7, 2015 8:50:03 GMT -5
Maybe I can change it and as though she did get out just before it vanished.
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Post by Raine Dearly on Sept 7, 2015 8:51:54 GMT -5
Yes I have. Thats the episode that made Melanie a done deal character for me.
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Post by Raine Dearly on Sept 7, 2015 8:53:23 GMT -5
I'll start again maybe I can pm it to you Bab before I post them out.
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Post by Deleted on Sept 7, 2015 12:50:17 GMT -5
so.. what you're saying is Jarrod is looking back on the times in DevilVille? Because it seems like he's conversing face to face with Melanie in DevilVille. You need to make things clearer than that Raine, your stories are super confusing to read.
If you're going to make a story based on the series, then like Bab said you can't just ignore the series' continuity and rules, it makes things confusing. I'd recommend just making your own universe if you're going to just ignore continuity in fanfics.
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Post by Lucky on Sept 7, 2015 14:51:52 GMT -5
I do agree with Mizan and Bab, Raine, I do also have to ask if you've read Trey's stories which include Cadpig, have you seen any of the episodes besides De-Village Elder, like I claim, if you had Rebecca try and talk to Lucky, he'll just treat her like he just met her even if Two-Tone was involved, you won't be able to convince Lucky that he was hitting on her and even if she was able to get out, chances are she won't recognize what went on in DeVilVille, once they leave, there's no way of getting those times you had in DeVilVille back.
That's why I confused, I mean how was Melanie able to remember how her life was back in DeVilVille? In Hot Air Balloon RP, how are the others able to hear Melanie and Raine ask them a question? In Gen 1 RP's how was Raine and Mel able to have kids? I can understand that dogs can have jobs, I mean look at Homeward Bound, look at the Police Departments (They have German Shepherds.) But since Lucky and his siblings are pups, I don't see how they would be able to get jobs right away.
You've already explained why Cadpig didn't seem to know that Lucky was in the same farm and was far away, the other was sir which Cadpig never says to Lucky, she calls him by his name.
When you break the continuity, Raine, it just leaves more questions that need to be answered.
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Post by Raine Dearly on Sept 7, 2015 22:07:05 GMT -5
Then how do I bring Rebecca into RPS or other things that makes sense?
I mean can Rebecca be used or has the episode destroyed her. Because it seems stupid then.
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Post by Lucky on Sept 8, 2015 0:02:47 GMT -5
I don't think you can unless there's an RP that involves DeVilVille cause she chose to stay when Lucky asked for her to come with them back to Gruteley.
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Post by Raine Dearly on Sept 8, 2015 0:51:33 GMT -5
What about a fanfic
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Post by Raine Dearly on Sept 8, 2015 0:53:34 GMT -5
Like Rebecca behind bars or When I tell stories of Melanie, Jacob and Her
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Post by Lucky on Sept 8, 2015 2:34:16 GMT -5
A backstory like Melanie's Origin is okay, I'm not implying that's bad, cause everyone would like to know more about it. You can include Rebecca and everyone in DeVilVille in that, if you would like, but it's got to be people from DeVilVille only, Raine, and the others can't be involved.
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