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Well, today I am going to be doing Trey Vores first fan fiction which included images, “Everybody Loathes Jerko”
Fanfiction review
Title: Everybody Loathes Jerko
Rating: 6/10
Alright we all know that Trey-Vore does his stories in the storyboard/ comic format and this was his first story he done it, so since we already know how I feel at those in my review of “Domina Trix” lets go straight into the story.
For the title, unlike when I barely understood the title for Domina Trix, since I had been watching the television series “Everybody Loves Raymond” at the time I got the pun in the titles, so the title; pretty nicely done.
The story begins with the pups playing Spin the Bottle (Truth or Dare) and the first person it lands on is Dipstick and he…wait!? What does Dipstick look like? o.O
What happened to his muzzle? where’s it gone? His head just looks like a long cylinder with 3 circles drawn on it. I mean this is what the real Dipstick looks like…
Note the muzzle
But this is how Trey-Vore draws him
It looks as if someone ran over his face and it just looks, so creepy. O.o
Anyway back on the story, Dipstick goes for truth and Noggin asks what Tac is planning, my god is that all Noggin cares about!? Is this the only reason you decided to include Dipstick? Just so you can get information about Tac from him!? This is a game for fun! Not an interrogation! Oh god! Now that I am thinking of Noggin & Tac at the same time, I am having flash backs to
“It Ends Now”! Drake then is asked what the worst thing he has done is, to which he says is when he asked for a picture of Noggin being dunked in the infamous dip from “Who Framed Roger Rabbit”
Wait!? Did he just say a picture request? Is the author trying to make reference to, real forum events!? How does that work!? I mean; The world of 101 Dalmatians and the world of the Sparky Forum members are completely different world’s altogether! And if he asked someone to draw that picture for him, who drew it? It makes no sense!
Already I found three problems with this story and I haven’t even got past the first chapter yet!
The bottle then lands on Belchic and just as he is about to have his turn, Jerko (the epic fail of a bully who doesn’t seem to have any explanation of why he is a jerk) randomly shows up and insults everyone, but then that is sorted quickly and Belchic explains the most disgustingly REPLUSIVE thing that he’s ever seen, heard, or done. (OH MY GOD HE’S GOING TO TELL US THE STORY OF WHEN HE WROTE
“It Ends Now!” AHHHH!!!)
Also I am getting more and more suspicious on who actually wrote this. Cause it seems Belchics characters are getting glorified (Star has commented how he finds Belchic cool) a story which glorifies Belchics characters? Which author is most known to do that with past experience?
Belchic then tells us a tale of one day he had a cookie however Mooch stole and ate it however it had a fly on it, whilst laughing a booger came out of Belchics mouth and into Moochs, the bully pup then ran off but is then splat against the wall when a piggy shoots it’s poop out when Roger gave him laxative. Well, that was just…sick!
I know I said this in most my other reviews but Belchic got upset with my story as I had death in it while this one has people spitting boogers into peoples mouth, and people getting splattered with pig sh*t (you even get to see them covered in pig sh*t) ok!? I am detecting a hypocrite again.
The bottle then lands on Lucky and he goes for dare, Belchic then dares him to, transform into a vampire, sprout bolts from his neck while he hops up and down singing "Don't you wish your girlfriend was hot like me" at a county fair…Is Belchic smoking some illegal substance!? What Parallel Dimension would he think that’s possible!?
People try to show him how to properly do a dare without the use of drugs, and Roxy does…a musical number with the puppy boy band from “Domina Trix”…
Ok like usually, I skip the song as it is technically unnecessary and it just gets a little weird at points. You know what I want to call these moments? You can guess and I say it because I’m nice like that…
THE BIG LIPPED ALIGATOR MOMENT!Belchic then dares, Lucky, Rolly, Cadpig, Two-Tone, Jewel, Patch, Dipstick & Wizzer (despite the fact that it’s meant to be LUCKYS dare, not a group) to do the ultimate puppy totem pole…ok now I am convinced that Belchic actually wrote this story, not Trey-Vore. Trey just only did the drawing for it.
So the pups get together and…wait!? Has Trey done the same mistake for Wizzer and forgot to draw his muzzle. My god! He looks like a pup that had his head ripped off and then someone glued an American football where his head use to be and painted it black and white.
Here is what Wizzer looks like in the series
And here is how Trey done him
Why are you forgetting the muzzle for these guys Trey?
Jerko spies on them as they make the totem pole and then sees Roger with a barbecue talking about how that guy from “King of the Hill” wanted him to get some propane before “Bevis & Butthead” beat him up. Jerko gets a plan to stop the pups’ game.
I actually think that people who think Jerko is a bad guy is wrong, I think it’s the other way around, The Truth or Dare pups are the villains for making a Totem Pole and Jerko is the hero trying to stop them.
The pups are then able to get the totem pole done (Seriously, Belchic did write this. It’s clear as a glass window)
Jerko then shoots hot coal into Two-Tones butt which causes her and other pups to go flying. And then hot coal falls on top of them causing a fireball of pups to fly straight into the water trough.
Belchic then shows up showing he’s recorded it and for some reason, Konami thinks it was Lucky who did it saying “It was You” (easy mistake to make where Jerko seems to look just like Lucky) and then we get a looooong scene where Sanka is confused thinking that Konami meant someone called “Yu” and they go on and on about trying to make Sanka understand. This is going to be a long chapter isn’t it?
And yes, it is serves no use to the story, ridiculous and is not mentioned again…
Fine…two times in one review…
THE BIG LIPPED ALIGATOR MOMENT!Belchic then learns Tippy was caught in the fireballs too and vowels death to Jerko. Ok how come he’s ok with a dozen other innocent pups being fire balled with even Two-Tones butt getting burnt however when it comes to Tippy, that’s when it’s murder time!
And also Belchic is upset I had killing in my fic where he says he’s going to kill here. You see hypocrites!
They then find Jerko and get ready to beat him up, however Jerko escapes, oh boy! This means there’s going to be a chase around the farm, not stopping until Jerko is in there…What? The whole Jerko thing is resolved in 2 seconds by a trap Drake set up earlier…
WHY ARE TREY VORE STORIES SO ANTI-CLIMATIC! They are like episodes of “Full House” the problems are resolved in at least one minute! We need more build up to the climax before you fully resolve it people! Make it last at least more than two chapters.
So they all beat the sh*t out of Jerko and tell all live happily ever after…OR DO THEY!?
It seems that Tac has watched the events of this entire story and he laughs as it fades out to black.
And then the story is like
“The End?”And I’m like
…”I don’t know!”And then the story is over with absolutely no explanation what Tac had to do with any of it.
So overall, I say this doesn’t do as well as other Trey-Vore stories…who am I kidding!? It’s a god d**n Belchic story! I say this as it seems to be as predictable, anti-climatic, and Belchic character glorifying as all other Belchic story. I am not fooled for a single minute. The only thing Trey seemed to do in this was draw it.
I must admit, it has been a year and a half since I last looked at this and it isn’t as good as I remembered it to be. I guess because that since it was the first story I read on the forum and I was just happy to see some BPS pups were doing something, I got hyped.
But now since I am older and more experienced, I just feel this story was a bit too silly, it was filled with some pointless scenes, plot holes, character glorifying, and anti-climaxes. So really, Trey hadn’t changed much when he did “Domina Trix”
However you got to be fair, Trey-Vore has actually done something for fanfictions which no one had ever done before, he did pictures for them and you got to admire the time and effort he did drawing the pictures so we could enjoy the fiction.
I guess in a way you could enjoy this, it is a guilty pleasure to say the least, it’s silly but an enjoyable type of silly.
So it’s alright I guess and worth one read I guess.
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