Post by miza on Oct 21, 2009 19:58:50 GMT -5
I thought I'd run this through you guys first, so you guys could help be getting the possible Mary-sue out of her X) ...Does she have those traits? D: That person who reads all of this, gets my thumbs up XD I don't think I'd read this whole thing XD
TMNT - character. (Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles, if someone didn't know ;P)
Nicole Emilia Cox
Nicknames: Nika, Lil' Climber.
Gender: Female
Species: Day Gecko-mutant (used to be human)
Age: 15 years
Weapon: She's not used to fight with weapons, so she hasn't decided yet.
Hobbies: She started practicing Taekwondo when she was around three since she was quite aggressive, that way she learned to take her frustration out on something else.* She also practiced wall climbing on amateur level. Now when she's not human anymore, she likes to playing video games, listening music and daydreaming.
FAVORITE:
-color: Red, lavender
-music: Rock/Pop, likes almost all music though.
-food: Spicy food and sour candies.
-place: Mall, her own room and the dojang*.
LEAST FAVORITE:
-color: White, it's just too plain.
-music: classical, country.
-food: All fish foods, raisins.
-place: Labs, hospitals and churches.
Personality:
Nicole's outgoing and cheerful person. She's quite emotional and acts exactly how she's feeling. So if she gets mad things are most likely going to get broken. She's sad really rarely, and if she is, she most likely would sulk and ignore everyone around her 'till she feels better. She's also outspoken and she often says what she thinks even if she really should keep it inside.
Since she's cheerful people person, she loves to make other laugh and if she gets attention while doing it, everybody wins.
Nicole is sly and she can always figure out something to do, if things gets boring, but the ideas usually are stupid/dangerous/or just plain idiotic.
She's the last person to give up easily. She's been raised to believe in herself and in the things she wants to do. She believes she can do anything as long as she tried hard enough.
"I'm no angel, but I can make you smile."
Strengths:
-In fight: She has strong legs, good balance and since she's gecko she can climb on walls. Nicole is quite flexible.
-In life: She's perceptive and she gets along with almost any kind of people, she's fast learner (in things that interests her, in others... not so much.) and she's rarely offended.
Weaknesses:
-In fights: Her moods affects her too much, she might have temper issues or get nervous
too easily. She having hard time to stay calm. Doesn't pay enough attention to her
surrounding when in a fight.
-In life: She can't cook (kitchen will explode), she can't sing (ears will bleed), nor can she paint (disaster) or play instruments. She can't stand/sit still for more than few minutes, making her unable to meditate even if her life depended on it. She's too self-confident in wrong situations. She's bit too spoiled.
History:
She had loving scientist parents, who felt guilty 'bout not spending more time with their daughter. Nicole understood this, and loved her parents anyway. (OMG, what?! They didn't hate her and abuse her?! What?! THIS IS MADNESS!) They always told their daughter everything they did in their work, and she felt quite uncomfortable when she heard their newest project. Make one of those green mutants so they could find out their hiding place and know who and what are they.
James and Jade Cox had failed with 19 people, what had lead to their deaths. The man they were working for gave them one last chance. If they failed, they would be killed. James and Jade got scared and since they had no volunteers, they decided to use their daughter. They loved her madly, and they couldn't bear the though that she would be left alone in that world. When she came home from her taekwondo practice, they all ate dinner together. Little did she know that there were hidden sleeping bills. Her parents felt really guilty and they wishes they didn't have to do it. Nicole noticed her parents keeping something from her, but she didn't push the issue. Next time she woke up, she was in some test tube thingy. With using geckos DNA they had managed to create mutation. Her parents were on the other side of glass and repeated calming words like "You'll be okay, it's okay.", "We'll make you better once this is over". She of course were disappointed in her parents, but also confused and scared. When they took her out she freaked out. She ran as fast as she could, she just couldn't stay there. She hated places like that.
She decided to run after grabbing her most important things at her home, and her parents called in few hours her. They kept apologizing her and hey told her the whole story. They were on a airport, ready to run away before getting killed. They said they wanted to take her with them, but if they went back to get her, they would be all found. And while they would get killed, she would be experimented and used. She didn't know how she should have felt. Be mad or try to understand why they didn't tell her in first place?
They told her to hide and keep low profile for some time and when ever they could, they'd find her and they'd turn their daughter back to human. They promised and she believed them. Nicole hoped nobody would catch them.
Nicole tried to calm down and when she succeed, she stood up. Things weren't too bad, she had her bank card, she could raise some money and then hide. But where could you hide when you were giant mutant lizard? She was taught to survive on her own. She just had to believe. She lived few days in shadows on some old alleys and whatever she could get without being seen. And with her luck, she bumped into street gang. She could fight, but not against that many people. That many men. Well, it's not hard to guess what then happened. Four mutant turtles heard her scream and saved her. She had nearly an heart attack when she saw mutant reptiles (she hadn't really took it in that she was one also.) and thought she had gone crazy. She fainted.
*1 = Yesh, when she was around 3. In Junior group, you know? Where you can go with a guardian? ...What? I needed give her something! Like someone could learn super awesome fighting style in few days. Tsk.
Well, she accepted that as her own thing, and kept practicing it.
*2 = Dojang as in Dojo. Karate has Dojo while Taekwondo has Dojang. She loves it.
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So, what do you guys think? Does she have Mary Sue traits? If yes, tell me what are they and how to fix them ;P Oh, and she doesn't, I repeat, DOESN'T fall for anyone. She had a boyfriend. Kinda dumbed him. You would too if BAM! turned into giant lizard. ;P
TMNT - character. (Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles, if someone didn't know ;P)
Nicole Emilia Cox
Nicknames: Nika, Lil' Climber.
Gender: Female
Species: Day Gecko-mutant (used to be human)
Age: 15 years
Weapon: She's not used to fight with weapons, so she hasn't decided yet.
Hobbies: She started practicing Taekwondo when she was around three since she was quite aggressive, that way she learned to take her frustration out on something else.* She also practiced wall climbing on amateur level. Now when she's not human anymore, she likes to playing video games, listening music and daydreaming.
FAVORITE:
-color: Red, lavender
-music: Rock/Pop, likes almost all music though.
-food: Spicy food and sour candies.
-place: Mall, her own room and the dojang*.
LEAST FAVORITE:
-color: White, it's just too plain.
-music: classical, country.
-food: All fish foods, raisins.
-place: Labs, hospitals and churches.
Personality:
Nicole's outgoing and cheerful person. She's quite emotional and acts exactly how she's feeling. So if she gets mad things are most likely going to get broken. She's sad really rarely, and if she is, she most likely would sulk and ignore everyone around her 'till she feels better. She's also outspoken and she often says what she thinks even if she really should keep it inside.
Since she's cheerful people person, she loves to make other laugh and if she gets attention while doing it, everybody wins.
Nicole is sly and she can always figure out something to do, if things gets boring, but the ideas usually are stupid/dangerous/or just plain idiotic.
She's the last person to give up easily. She's been raised to believe in herself and in the things she wants to do. She believes she can do anything as long as she tried hard enough.
"I'm no angel, but I can make you smile."
Strengths:
-In fight: She has strong legs, good balance and since she's gecko she can climb on walls. Nicole is quite flexible.
-In life: She's perceptive and she gets along with almost any kind of people, she's fast learner (in things that interests her, in others... not so much.) and she's rarely offended.
Weaknesses:
-In fights: Her moods affects her too much, she might have temper issues or get nervous
too easily. She having hard time to stay calm. Doesn't pay enough attention to her
surrounding when in a fight.
-In life: She can't cook (kitchen will explode), she can't sing (ears will bleed), nor can she paint (disaster) or play instruments. She can't stand/sit still for more than few minutes, making her unable to meditate even if her life depended on it. She's too self-confident in wrong situations. She's bit too spoiled.
History:
She had loving scientist parents, who felt guilty 'bout not spending more time with their daughter. Nicole understood this, and loved her parents anyway. (OMG, what?! They didn't hate her and abuse her?! What?! THIS IS MADNESS!) They always told their daughter everything they did in their work, and she felt quite uncomfortable when she heard their newest project. Make one of those green mutants so they could find out their hiding place and know who and what are they.
James and Jade Cox had failed with 19 people, what had lead to their deaths. The man they were working for gave them one last chance. If they failed, they would be killed. James and Jade got scared and since they had no volunteers, they decided to use their daughter. They loved her madly, and they couldn't bear the though that she would be left alone in that world. When she came home from her taekwondo practice, they all ate dinner together. Little did she know that there were hidden sleeping bills. Her parents felt really guilty and they wishes they didn't have to do it. Nicole noticed her parents keeping something from her, but she didn't push the issue. Next time she woke up, she was in some test tube thingy. With using geckos DNA they had managed to create mutation. Her parents were on the other side of glass and repeated calming words like "You'll be okay, it's okay.", "We'll make you better once this is over". She of course were disappointed in her parents, but also confused and scared. When they took her out she freaked out. She ran as fast as she could, she just couldn't stay there. She hated places like that.
She decided to run after grabbing her most important things at her home, and her parents called in few hours her. They kept apologizing her and hey told her the whole story. They were on a airport, ready to run away before getting killed. They said they wanted to take her with them, but if they went back to get her, they would be all found. And while they would get killed, she would be experimented and used. She didn't know how she should have felt. Be mad or try to understand why they didn't tell her in first place?
They told her to hide and keep low profile for some time and when ever they could, they'd find her and they'd turn their daughter back to human. They promised and she believed them. Nicole hoped nobody would catch them.
Nicole tried to calm down and when she succeed, she stood up. Things weren't too bad, she had her bank card, she could raise some money and then hide. But where could you hide when you were giant mutant lizard? She was taught to survive on her own. She just had to believe. She lived few days in shadows on some old alleys and whatever she could get without being seen. And with her luck, she bumped into street gang. She could fight, but not against that many people. That many men. Well, it's not hard to guess what then happened. Four mutant turtles heard her scream and saved her. She had nearly an heart attack when she saw mutant reptiles (she hadn't really took it in that she was one also.) and thought she had gone crazy. She fainted.
*1 = Yesh, when she was around 3. In Junior group, you know? Where you can go with a guardian? ...What? I needed give her something! Like someone could learn super awesome fighting style in few days. Tsk.
Well, she accepted that as her own thing, and kept practicing it.
*2 = Dojang as in Dojo. Karate has Dojo while Taekwondo has Dojang. She loves it.
--
So, what do you guys think? Does she have Mary Sue traits? If yes, tell me what are they and how to fix them ;P Oh, and she doesn't, I repeat, DOESN'T fall for anyone. She had a boyfriend. Kinda dumbed him. You would too if BAM! turned into giant lizard. ;P