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Post by Raine Dearly on Feb 28, 2013 16:34:22 GMT -5
Name: Antonio (Tony) Bonanza Gender: Male D.O.B: 1/3/00 Age: Puppy Nationality: Spanish, English Love Interests: Penny Dearly Interests: Soccer, Professional Fighting. Relatives: Melanie (Sister), Rebecca (cousins) Physical Appearance: Tony is a Dalmatian who looks a bit like Dipstick, just no black tip on his tail and he is a little skinnier than Mel is and he has blue eyes.
History: Mel was on the phone one day talking Spanish to someone and Raine was suspicious that she only spoke Spanish to his kid, himself or Rebecca, yet it was obvious she was clearly talk to someone else other than those dogs. Raine went up to Mel and said " Honey who are you talking to?" Melanie replied " oh you haven't met my brother Tony?", Raine replied " ahh no I haven't", Mel said " well here is your chance to" as she handed the phone to him. Raine speaks" hello, Tony I think, I'm Raine, your sister's future husband" Raine waited for ages and as he was about to put the phone down, Tony spoke" Hi amigo nice to meet you, my history is like Mel so can I stay with you for a bit, until I get used to America?" Raine said to himself" he just moved to America?" then to him" ahh yeah if your Mel's brother then yeah". So Tony moved and met Penny and fell in love with her.
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Post by Deleted on Mar 20, 2013 14:37:40 GMT -5
well.. no offense Raine, your characters are cute, but there's a few holes in your story..
for one they seem highly anthromorphized to be four legged canines ^^; I mean... talking on the phone?
And how can he be Rebecca's cousin? I'm assuming you mean Rebecca from the episode Devil-age Elder, if so, did he come from DevilVille? If so, how did he escape? And why is he half Spanish when the people in DevilVille appeared to be of Scottish origin? ^^:
Also.... I would suggest developing his interest in Penny more... why does he like her? Does he think she's cute? Find her bossiness endearing? Is there something SHE would like about HIM? just meeting someone does not automatically equal love... it takes time and effort to get to know that person. And even then, it may not work if their personalities are not compatible ^^; Think about what makes them compatible or if Penny would even be interested, and if not, and he has a one sided crush, again, WHY. Why does he like her, think why. Why why why. It makes things more believable.
Also.... there really is nothing about Antonio's personality listed here, except that he's .. well, related to your other characters and that's not a personality trait anyway..and again, how can the dogs speak Spanish if no one around them did? ^^;
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Post by Raine Dearly on Mar 20, 2013 15:49:06 GMT -5
i will make a fanfic
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Post by Belchic on Mar 20, 2013 18:03:21 GMT -5
Penny has a mate, eh? Cool.
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