Post by corgi on Jan 2, 2008 8:35:46 GMT -5
That's the first 101 dalmatian fanfic that I put here, in the forum. It's a story that I'd like to draw in a comic someday, but it's a huge work and effort, and I haven't enough time yet, so I've decided to write it in a fic for the moment.
The Story is a continuation of "101 dalmatians 2, Patch London Adventure", so if you haven't seen it, maybe the fic contains many spoilers, so be careful.
In this story I wanna explore the character Lil'Lightning. I always thought that, even if he didn't acted right, Thunderbolt didn't at first too. Both was mean, but both are good in their deep, and as long as Thunderbolt could change, Lightning can too.
Well, here is the first part of my fic. I hope you like it as much as I enjoyed writing it:
It was a common morning in London, common except for the news: Thunderbolt, the famous dog star saved 99 Dalmatians puppies from an eccentric woman who wanted to convert them in canvas. Really, Patch, one of the little puppies, was the one who really saved the day, but nobody would know this, and the glory would be, again, for Thunderbolt.
Lightning looked the scene: Thunderbolt and the puppies surrounded or photographers and reporters, all them really happy to finish that adventure, and then, Lightning sighed. A policeman stroked Lightning’s head–. Come on, friend, get in the car –Lightning didn’t protest more, and got in.
-What the hell are you doing with my dog? –a fat man with a moustache, the producer of “The adventures of Thunderbolt and Lightning” arrived clearly annoyed.
-Yo… your dog? –The policeman said-. Sorry sir, I thought that was the dog of that crazy woman… he was in the scene when… -The policeman sound a bit worried for the mistake, whereas takes Lightning out of the car-. Sorry again, sir.
-Ok, no problem… -the producer stroked softly Lightning’s head, who moved his short tail slowly-. Come on, pal, come on to congratulate Thunderbolt for his feat! –the productor’s voice, who ignored the plot that Lightning thought, sounded really sweet when he talked with his dear puppy. Then, he went with Thunderbolt and the puppies.
Lightning walked a step towards them, and suddenly, he stopped. He looked again the scene, Thunderbolt having fun with the puppies, and Pongo and Perdita looking them pleased whereas the producer hugged and congratulated at Thunderbolt. Lightning felt that it wasn’t his place, and he wouldn’t be well received there. Then, he turned, and, slowly, started to walk away of there, to another place, no matter where, but far away from those who considered his friends.
-… And finally, the police arrived! –Patch was relating his adventures at his dad, whereas enjoys the warm sun of spring in the outside of the Cherry Tree Farm.
Pongo smiled-. It’s a great adventure, Patch.
-Yeah… and after that, Lightning disappeared… -Patch’s face became angry-. I hope he got his desert… dirty traitor…
-Well… If I have to be sincere, Patch, I wouldn’t be so hard on him –Pongo said.
-But dad… he deceived Thunderbolt…
-And Thunderbolt deceived you… at least, at first. Really, Patch, I see that they two were acting badly at first, but Thunderbolt had a little difference…
-What difference? Do you mean that he’s a hero?
-No, Patch. The difference is you. For disgrace, Lightning didn’t have someone like you, near to him, showing him what’s right and what isn’t. Thunderbolt was luckier.
-So… Lightning only needed someone in his side… -Patch repeated whereas his mind thought in his brother Phillip.
Not very far from there, a puppy was completely alone over a bunch of grass. Phillip’s look was lost in the sky whereas he sighed and remembered the worst moment in his life, when he was locked in a cage with all his brothers, and Lightning arrives.
-Look Phillip –a puppy said-. Lightning has come to help us!
-Lightning! –Phillip smiled widely and looked out of the cage to see his hero, but…
-I am not your little buddy! And you are no wonder dog! –Lightning’s voice sounded really mean- This kid trusted you, and look where it's got him .
-What's he mean? –Patch said.
-He's been lying to you all day, kid –Lightning continued-. He doesn't care about you or your family. He was just trying to get his name in the paper and save his job. Ask him!
-Wha…-Patch sound confused.
-No…Well, yeah, but, but…-Thunderbolt hesitated, without find a good explanation to Patch.
-But, but, but. Hey, genius, you're no hero! You're a fraud! –Lightning voice sounded each time more unpleasant-. And by the way... there never was a plan to recast you. I just had to get you out of the way. Now l get to go take your place on the show…MY show.
Lightning left the place laughing pleased to see that his plot was working. Phillip became really shocked. In a corner of the cage, he remained completely quiet, whereas two thick tears ran on his cheeks. Simply, he couldn’t believe that the scene that he saw some moments ago was real.
The tears appeared again in Phillip eyes, and he started to whimper-. Lightning… why you…? I… I trust in you…
-Phillip… -a calm voice sounded behind him.
-I’m sorry Whizzer… I wanna be alone…
-Phillip… I understand perfectly your pain… but you don’t have to be sad –Whizzer continues. Whizzer was one of his cleverest siblings. He born with a weak health, his little, thin body and his weak bladder, that produces more than one accident, was proof of his weakness. For that, he never was a very active boy, and also, above all due to his urine accidents, he was never very popular between his sibling; for that, he was many times alone, and that made him a very calm, reflexive child; the typical guy who finishing being really wise when he grow up.
-Don’t I!? My hero is really a villain, a traitor! And… and I can’t believe it! –Phillip hugged Whizzer whereas started to cry distressly.
-But Phillip… -Whizzer stroked Phillip’s back- You don’t know that.
-Come on… -Phillip said between whimpers- all we saw him perfectly… he betrayed Thunderbolt, he didn’t help us…
-Maybe… but you don’t know the complete story. Maybe Lightning had got his reasons. Maybe Thunderbolt was mean with him first… maybe… but pal, I can assure you a thing.
-What thing –Phillip asked whereas the last tears continued running on his face.
-I’m sure that Lightning is not so bad… I’m sure –Whizzer smiled, and hugged Phillip to console him.
-Phillip… -Whizzer said quite embarrassed-. I’m sorry… my weak bladder…
Phillip remained some seconds in silence, whereas he noticed his body wet-. Don’t worry Whizzer… don’t worry… -he finally said, quite embarrassed too.
A cold rain fell heavily over London. In that unpleasant evening, a little dog was walking looking for a place in where rest a bit. Lightning found a dry corner between some trashcans, and used some newspapers like blankets. He looked the dark, cloudy sky and sighed.
-What happened to me? In what kind of dog have I become? If I could go back in the time... –Lightning sighed again and put his head between his short fore legs, whereas started to whimper.
-Who is there? –the voice of an old dog sounded in the start of the alley in where Lightning was resting. Lightning kept silence, whereas the last drops of the rain were falling.
-Come on –the old dog said-, I’m not going to hurt you.
-I… I only wanna rest a bit here –Lightning said finally.
-Sorry… it wasn’t my intention to annoy you, but I heard you whimpering… are you ok? –The old dog, a basset hound, came nearer to Lightning.
-No… I’ve done something terrible… I’ve betrayed my best friend –Lightning turns his face ashamed.
-Tell me the story… maybe I can help you.
-It’s a long story…
-Don’t worry –the basset insisted- I’ve enough time.
Lightning told his story at the basset, how he felt jealous of Thunderbolt’s fame and popularity, how he thought in a plot to get rid of him, how he abandoned at him and the Dalmatian puppies whereas he went to take Thunderbolt’s place in the show, and how all the plot finally failed, getting Thunderbolt more fame and glory.
-… and finally here I am… and I’m so regretted… but it’s not enough, not this time –Lightning sighed. The tears were again appearing in his eyes.
-To be regretted is a start, kid, an important start –the basset said-. That means that you’ve learned from your mistakes. Now, do you know the next step?
Lightning kept silence waiting for the reply.
-The next step is to ask pardon. The only way to be in peace with yourself is to get the forgiveness of all those who you hurt.
-But… they’ll never forgive me! –Lightning said whereas two tears ran for his cheeks.
-You’ll never know if you don’t try it… and you know you must do it…
-You’re right… -Lightning said.
-Good luck with that, kid. I’m sure you’ll do the right –the basset hugs at Lightning.
-Thank you very much, sir. You’ve helped me sooo much! –Lightning hugs him tight in return, whereas whimper a bit more.
-Well –the basset said finally-, my human is for sure waiting that I return home. Good luck, kid. I hope to see you soon.
-I’ll always be grateful with you… See you soon, my friend.
The old basset left the alley, and Lightning rest a bit more. The next day would be hard, but he’d return home. Now he knows what he must do. It was time to start to do the things in the right way.
To be continued
The Story is a continuation of "101 dalmatians 2, Patch London Adventure", so if you haven't seen it, maybe the fic contains many spoilers, so be careful.
In this story I wanna explore the character Lil'Lightning. I always thought that, even if he didn't acted right, Thunderbolt didn't at first too. Both was mean, but both are good in their deep, and as long as Thunderbolt could change, Lightning can too.
Well, here is the first part of my fic. I hope you like it as much as I enjoyed writing it:
Reconciliation
1
It was a common morning in London, common except for the news: Thunderbolt, the famous dog star saved 99 Dalmatians puppies from an eccentric woman who wanted to convert them in canvas. Really, Patch, one of the little puppies, was the one who really saved the day, but nobody would know this, and the glory would be, again, for Thunderbolt.
Lightning looked the scene: Thunderbolt and the puppies surrounded or photographers and reporters, all them really happy to finish that adventure, and then, Lightning sighed. A policeman stroked Lightning’s head–. Come on, friend, get in the car –Lightning didn’t protest more, and got in.
-What the hell are you doing with my dog? –a fat man with a moustache, the producer of “The adventures of Thunderbolt and Lightning” arrived clearly annoyed.
-Yo… your dog? –The policeman said-. Sorry sir, I thought that was the dog of that crazy woman… he was in the scene when… -The policeman sound a bit worried for the mistake, whereas takes Lightning out of the car-. Sorry again, sir.
-Ok, no problem… -the producer stroked softly Lightning’s head, who moved his short tail slowly-. Come on, pal, come on to congratulate Thunderbolt for his feat! –the productor’s voice, who ignored the plot that Lightning thought, sounded really sweet when he talked with his dear puppy. Then, he went with Thunderbolt and the puppies.
Lightning walked a step towards them, and suddenly, he stopped. He looked again the scene, Thunderbolt having fun with the puppies, and Pongo and Perdita looking them pleased whereas the producer hugged and congratulated at Thunderbolt. Lightning felt that it wasn’t his place, and he wouldn’t be well received there. Then, he turned, and, slowly, started to walk away of there, to another place, no matter where, but far away from those who considered his friends.
2
-… And finally, the police arrived! –Patch was relating his adventures at his dad, whereas enjoys the warm sun of spring in the outside of the Cherry Tree Farm.
Pongo smiled-. It’s a great adventure, Patch.
-Yeah… and after that, Lightning disappeared… -Patch’s face became angry-. I hope he got his desert… dirty traitor…
-Well… If I have to be sincere, Patch, I wouldn’t be so hard on him –Pongo said.
-But dad… he deceived Thunderbolt…
-And Thunderbolt deceived you… at least, at first. Really, Patch, I see that they two were acting badly at first, but Thunderbolt had a little difference…
-What difference? Do you mean that he’s a hero?
-No, Patch. The difference is you. For disgrace, Lightning didn’t have someone like you, near to him, showing him what’s right and what isn’t. Thunderbolt was luckier.
-So… Lightning only needed someone in his side… -Patch repeated whereas his mind thought in his brother Phillip.
Not very far from there, a puppy was completely alone over a bunch of grass. Phillip’s look was lost in the sky whereas he sighed and remembered the worst moment in his life, when he was locked in a cage with all his brothers, and Lightning arrives.
-Look Phillip –a puppy said-. Lightning has come to help us!
-Lightning! –Phillip smiled widely and looked out of the cage to see his hero, but…
-I am not your little buddy! And you are no wonder dog! –Lightning’s voice sounded really mean- This kid trusted you, and look where it's got him .
-What's he mean? –Patch said.
-He's been lying to you all day, kid –Lightning continued-. He doesn't care about you or your family. He was just trying to get his name in the paper and save his job. Ask him!
-Wha…-Patch sound confused.
-No…Well, yeah, but, but…-Thunderbolt hesitated, without find a good explanation to Patch.
-But, but, but. Hey, genius, you're no hero! You're a fraud! –Lightning voice sounded each time more unpleasant-. And by the way... there never was a plan to recast you. I just had to get you out of the way. Now l get to go take your place on the show…MY show.
Lightning left the place laughing pleased to see that his plot was working. Phillip became really shocked. In a corner of the cage, he remained completely quiet, whereas two thick tears ran on his cheeks. Simply, he couldn’t believe that the scene that he saw some moments ago was real.
The tears appeared again in Phillip eyes, and he started to whimper-. Lightning… why you…? I… I trust in you…
-Phillip… -a calm voice sounded behind him.
-I’m sorry Whizzer… I wanna be alone…
-Phillip… I understand perfectly your pain… but you don’t have to be sad –Whizzer continues. Whizzer was one of his cleverest siblings. He born with a weak health, his little, thin body and his weak bladder, that produces more than one accident, was proof of his weakness. For that, he never was a very active boy, and also, above all due to his urine accidents, he was never very popular between his sibling; for that, he was many times alone, and that made him a very calm, reflexive child; the typical guy who finishing being really wise when he grow up.
-Don’t I!? My hero is really a villain, a traitor! And… and I can’t believe it! –Phillip hugged Whizzer whereas started to cry distressly.
-But Phillip… -Whizzer stroked Phillip’s back- You don’t know that.
-Come on… -Phillip said between whimpers- all we saw him perfectly… he betrayed Thunderbolt, he didn’t help us…
-Maybe… but you don’t know the complete story. Maybe Lightning had got his reasons. Maybe Thunderbolt was mean with him first… maybe… but pal, I can assure you a thing.
-What thing –Phillip asked whereas the last tears continued running on his face.
-I’m sure that Lightning is not so bad… I’m sure –Whizzer smiled, and hugged Phillip to console him.
-Phillip… -Whizzer said quite embarrassed-. I’m sorry… my weak bladder…
Phillip remained some seconds in silence, whereas he noticed his body wet-. Don’t worry Whizzer… don’t worry… -he finally said, quite embarrassed too.
3
A cold rain fell heavily over London. In that unpleasant evening, a little dog was walking looking for a place in where rest a bit. Lightning found a dry corner between some trashcans, and used some newspapers like blankets. He looked the dark, cloudy sky and sighed.
-What happened to me? In what kind of dog have I become? If I could go back in the time... –Lightning sighed again and put his head between his short fore legs, whereas started to whimper.
-Who is there? –the voice of an old dog sounded in the start of the alley in where Lightning was resting. Lightning kept silence, whereas the last drops of the rain were falling.
-Come on –the old dog said-, I’m not going to hurt you.
-I… I only wanna rest a bit here –Lightning said finally.
-Sorry… it wasn’t my intention to annoy you, but I heard you whimpering… are you ok? –The old dog, a basset hound, came nearer to Lightning.
-No… I’ve done something terrible… I’ve betrayed my best friend –Lightning turns his face ashamed.
-Tell me the story… maybe I can help you.
-It’s a long story…
-Don’t worry –the basset insisted- I’ve enough time.
Lightning told his story at the basset, how he felt jealous of Thunderbolt’s fame and popularity, how he thought in a plot to get rid of him, how he abandoned at him and the Dalmatian puppies whereas he went to take Thunderbolt’s place in the show, and how all the plot finally failed, getting Thunderbolt more fame and glory.
-… and finally here I am… and I’m so regretted… but it’s not enough, not this time –Lightning sighed. The tears were again appearing in his eyes.
-To be regretted is a start, kid, an important start –the basset said-. That means that you’ve learned from your mistakes. Now, do you know the next step?
Lightning kept silence waiting for the reply.
-The next step is to ask pardon. The only way to be in peace with yourself is to get the forgiveness of all those who you hurt.
-But… they’ll never forgive me! –Lightning said whereas two tears ran for his cheeks.
-You’ll never know if you don’t try it… and you know you must do it…
-You’re right… -Lightning said.
-Good luck with that, kid. I’m sure you’ll do the right –the basset hugs at Lightning.
-Thank you very much, sir. You’ve helped me sooo much! –Lightning hugs him tight in return, whereas whimper a bit more.
-Well –the basset said finally-, my human is for sure waiting that I return home. Good luck, kid. I hope to see you soon.
-I’ll always be grateful with you… See you soon, my friend.
The old basset left the alley, and Lightning rest a bit more. The next day would be hard, but he’d return home. Now he knows what he must do. It was time to start to do the things in the right way.
To be continued