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Post by Belchic on Sept 29, 2008 0:37:24 GMT -5
Chapter 1
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One day, the Heartbreakers were practicing some teamwork of theirs at their secret headquarters.
Diana: Alright, gals. The top secret information we need is up there out of our range. You all know what to do. Ready. Stack!
*Stealth stands at the base, Thompson jumps on top of Stealth, Jenny jumps on top of Thompson, Emma jumps on top of Jenny and Malinda jumps on top of Emma while Diana and Rob support at the base. Malinda grabs the plans.*
Diana: Excellent work, Malinda. Now, break.
*The Heartbreakers break their totem pole.*
Diana: Okay, now, there's a big gap. Everyone, let's bounce Emma into the air so she can get across!
*Diana, Stealth, Jenny, Malinda, Thompson and Rob bounce Emma into the air, and at the peak of her jump, Emma deployed a parachute to glide down.*
Diana: Great job. Now, Thompson, let's dig for that hidden treasure we need!
*Diana marks an X on the ground while Thompson does a handstand with aid from Emma, Jenny, Malinda, and Rob, Stealth grabs Thompson's ankles and Thompson digs into the ground.*
Thompson: This got my paws dirty!
Diana: Well, you did a good job. Now, let's launch Emma to smash that target!
*Malinda grabs Jenny's wrists while Thompson grabs her ankles, Emma is loaded into Jenny's gut and Diana holds her, Rob and Stealth pull back and Emma is used as a fireball. She breaks the target.*
Jenny: Ugh! That gave me a stomach ache!
Emma: Speak for yourself! I'm luck enough to not have any broken bones!
Diana: Okay, Rob, Stealth, join. Jenny, board. Everyone else, grab ahold!
*Jenny jumps on top of Rob and Stealth and while they hold hands, they start running; Malinda, Thompson, Emma and Diana hold on while they run.*
Diana: Now for some destructive moves! Everyone gather around Stealth!
*Diana, Emma, Jenny, Malinda, Thompson and Rob all start to agonize Stealth; finally Stealth loses her cool and goes temporarily berserk, but she's kinda soft this time.*
Diana: Huh? Take five, everyone.
Stealth went to sit down, and Diana decided to sit by her.
Diana: What's the matter, Stealth? You're not your usual self today.
Stealth: Oh, I've just been thinking about our group lately.
Diana: What about it?
Stealth: Diana, whatever happened to the good old days when it was just you, me and Emma? Ever since we got all these new teammates, we've become more of a crowd. We used to be like evil female versions of the Three Musketeers.
Diana: Is there anything wrong with that?
Stealth: Well, I just want to go on another crusade when it's just the three of us again. Besides, I don't think this group should be worthy of the name, Heartbreakers.
Diana: What's wrong with that?
Stealth: Well, the Heartbreakers are supposed to be evil while at the same time, charming. You, Emma and Rob are the only charming members, while everyone else seems to be just whiny little brats...and I'm just a psycho.
Diana: You think you're disappointed? I'm the leader of this group, and I don't even have a special team move of my own, even though you and everyone else does.
Stealth: I'm sure you'll think of something; you are a clever dog.
Diana: I'll tell you what, Stealth: tomorrow, I'll set up a time for you me and Emma to get together and do something, and it'll be just the three of us, but in return, I'd like you to help me come up with my special team move.
Stealth: I'll make that a deal, Diana. I think I know just what we're going to do tomorrow too.
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To be continued...
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Post by Trey_Vore on Sept 29, 2008 8:36:07 GMT -5
Good start to a story.
I might add that like Diana, Emma and Rob, Malinda is very charming.
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Post by babclayman on Sept 29, 2008 12:54:28 GMT -5
I might add that like Diana, Emma and Rob, Malinda is very charming. That is correct =P If anyone is a brat it's Thompson But still quite a good start, taking concepts from the game idea seems interesting
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Post by Belchic on Sept 29, 2008 13:14:51 GMT -5
Glad to see some compliments from my best friends on the entire board. I'll try to get the next chapter up sometime this week.
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Post by Deleted on Sept 29, 2008 14:31:14 GMT -5
Yeah ;D Thats a really good start cant wait for the next part...
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Post by Belchic on Sept 30, 2008 0:02:36 GMT -5
Chapter 2
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The next day came, and Stealth woke up fairly early. It wasn't long until Diana and Emma met up with her.
Diana: We're here, Stealth.
Emma: So, Diana tells me that you wanted to go on some sort of...private mission?
Stealth: Well, sort of, but allow me to explain. There's someone living around El Perdido who I think can be of some good use for us and that will help us dominate the farm.
Diana: Ooh! Sounds intriguing!
Stealth: Yeah, I want to go out and show him to you.
Emma: Sounds like fun.
Diana: Just a second. Before we go, I want to check something.
Diana peeked outside. Emma and Stealth looked with her. They saw other pups playing outside.
Diana: That's what I was afraid of. The plains are crawling with other puppies. If they see us walking by, they may think we're up to something. You know me. I like to do my dirty work when it's unexpected.
Emma: She has a point there. We gotta sneak past those puppies somehow.
Stealth: Leave that to me, girls.
All the good puppies outside continued to play as usual. Just then, a very tall Diana walked past them wearing a hat and a long outfit. A couple pups noticed, but they just shrugged and continued playing.
Diana: Heh. I was kind of expecting Stealth to take out those pups, but this seems to work better. Saves us time.
Emma: *at mid-section* Okay, we're passed the pups and going into the forest, so why are we still undercover?
Stealth: *on bottom* So we could be protected from the alligators.
Diana: Who would've guessed that our muscle could be so clever?
Emma: She must like us a lot.
Stealth: Hey, don't take that too personally.
The trio continued to stalk through the swamp and eventually came to a cave.
Stealth: This is the place.
The Heartbreakers took off their disguise, broke their totem pole and hid behind a rock. They heard snoring coming from inside the cave.
Diana: So, Stealth, who lives here?
Stealth: Living in that cave is a carnivourous wolf. His name is Fang, and he loves to eat puppies!
Emma: He does?
Diana: Sounds villainous.
Stealth: He is indeed a purely evil wolf, but he's also quite gullible.
Diana: Hmm...you know, I think I might be able to come up with a scheme to lure a couple puppies over here, and have him try to eat them. Their cries for help will get the attention of all the other puppies, and then one by one, the pups will come over here and try to save them, and then eventually, the farm will be ours!
Emma: I wonder how evil he really is.
Stealth: Allow me to demonstrate.
Stealth tossed out a decoy puppy in front of the cave, and then started making puppy noises. A monstorous growl came from the cave and a ferocious blue wolf emerged. He violently ate the decoy, but then realized it was fake. He then saw the girls. They looked somewhat shocked.
Emma: Should we run?
Stealth: Yeah, we should. Climb aboard!
Emma hopped onto Stealth's shoulders, and Diana hopped onto Emma's.
Diana: He looks really hungry. Make tracks, Stealth!
Stealth ran away at what seemed like Super Sonic speed. They ended up back at their hideout.
Emma: Phew! That was close.
Diana: Stealth, why didn't you beat up the wolf?
Stealth: I wanted to make sure he was still in one piece. We're going to need him for our plans to conquer the farm.
Diana: Heh. She's even smarter than I thought!
Stealth: I guess that was our little outing with just the three of us. So now I gotta help you come up with a team move, right, Diana?
Diana: That won't be necessary, Stealth. Your plot to sneak past the puppies gave me an idea for a team move already. Something we can do to sneak past enemy radars!
Emma: Cool! I can't wait to try that out!
Diana: Okay, girls, now, if you'll excuse me, I've got a scheme to plot.
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To be continued...
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Post by Trey_Vore on Sept 30, 2008 13:50:38 GMT -5
Uh-oh. Looks like Fang is going to become part of our group!
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Post by LoneWanderer Raiden on Sept 30, 2008 16:58:44 GMT -5
Hm, this is getting very interesting...
Great fic, Belch. Keep it up. ^^
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Post by Belchic on Oct 1, 2008 12:32:08 GMT -5
I'm glad you guys love it. I'm going to be extremely busy most of the rest of this week, so don't expect the next chapter until next week sometime.
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Post by babclayman on Oct 1, 2008 13:06:02 GMT -5
Interesting so far. If Fang did that to a toy dog i hate to see what he'd do to a real pup.
One thing i think as a plothole is that Stealth wants the Heartbreakers back as just her, Diana and Emma in the first chapter, yet shes ok with Fang being in it for this chapter
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Post by Belchic on Oct 3, 2008 1:54:50 GMT -5
Chapter 3
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Later that day, Tippy and Lizzie were playing together by jokingly fighting over a ball. Suddenly, Tippy caught a sent.
Lizzie: Yo, what's up, girl? You sniffing something good?
Tippy: It's this strange aroma. Whatever it is, I like it.
Lizzie: Is it food? I really hope it's food!
Tippy: I don't think so, Lizzie. It smells like a perfume of some kind.
Lizzie: Do you know where it's coming from?
Tippy: I'm not sure, but the only way to find out is by following the scent.
Lizzie: Hey, I should come with you. I want to know what that smell is too.
Tippy: Sure, you can come along with me.
They started to head towards the forest.
Lizzie: Say, Tippy, do you think I can stop by and have a snack first? All this thought about food has made me hungry.
Tippy: Let's save that for another adventure, Lizzie.
Meanwhile, in the barn, 101 RPM was doing some band practice. They were just wrapping up "Middle of Nowhere" by Hot Hot Heat. Belchic and Joey were watching them.
Joey: Okay, that was good.
Belchic: Rip-van rhyme! You get better every time!
Lucky: Well, thanks guys.
Cadpig: Always good to hear compliments from our friends.
Just then, all of a sudden, LeAnn came running in.
LeAnn: Guys! Tippy and Lizzie are missing!
Belchic: What do you mean, they're missing?
LeAnn: Last time I saw them, they were playing in the fields, but I came back five minutes later, and they were gone! I think they went out into the swamp! They could get themselves killed out there!
Belchic: Don't worry, LeAnn! I'll save them!
Joey: Can I go with you, Belchic? I never get to go anywhere.
Belchic: Sure, Joey. You can be my sidekick.
Belchic and Joey went out to look for their girlfriends. LeAnn exited as well. At that very moment, Cantor came in.
Cantor: What was LeAnn yelling about in here?
Spot: She just informed us that Tippy and Lizzie have gone missing! Maybe they're going towards DOOM!
Lucky: Relax, Spot.
Cadpig: Take a chill pill, chicken.
Cantor: You know, they do have a point there. They could be just somewhere around the farm that we haven't even checked yet. We can search them out by using the method of "Calculatus Eliminatus".
*cue big-band-esque music*
Cantor: When you've mislaid a certain something, keep your cool, and don't get hot. Calculatus Eliminatus is the best friend that you've got. Calculatus Eliminatus always helps an awful lot. The way to find a missing something is to find out where it's not.
Well, they aren't here. I'll mark this X. They are not there. I'll mark that Y. They aren't around here either. So I'll mark that HKI. We just jot down all the places where it isn't, and gee whiz. Very shortly, we will find out where the missing object is.
Cantor: When you've mislaid a certain something, keep your cool, and don't get hot.
Lucky: Calculatus Eliminatus is the best friend that you've got.
Cadpig: Calculatus Eliminatus always helps an awful lot.
Cantor: The way to find a missing something...
Cantor/Lucky/Cadpig: ...is to find...out...where...it's...not!
*The music stops, and we cut to Noggin just standing there staring at everyone.*
Noggin: Well, now, I've just witnessed the most pointless musical number in history!
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To be continued...
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Post by Belchic on Oct 4, 2008 23:58:39 GMT -5
Wow. Nobody else has been commenting on this fic. I guess people are losing interest. Well, anyway, here's Chapter 4...
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Meanwhile, Tippy and Lizzie were still exploring following the scent they've been following. They ended up going into a cave. The cave was really dark, and the two somehow got seperated in the cave.
Lizzie: Oh my gosh! It's so dark in here. I see nothing...well, except black. You know the kinda stuff you see when your eyes are closed. Uh...Tippy? Are you around here somewhere? Are you listening to me? I think I want to go back now. Why did I even follow her in the first place? AHH! I feel something touching me! It feels like a cold wet nose! Uh...hello? Is someoe touching me? Is that you, Tippy?
She then heard a growl.
Lizzie: Tippy, if that's you, that was probably your stomach growling, and if it was, I knew we should have brought snacks.
She then heard a roar.
Lizzie: You're not Tippy. Tippy, where are you???
Tippy: I'm right here.
Lizzie: Where?
Tippy: Right next to you.
Lizzie: Do you think you have a light or something? I'm tired of this pitch black, and I want to see who this other someone is.
Tippy: Luckily for you, I am quite a generous pup.
Tippy whipped out a lighter and turned it on. The light revealed Tippy and Lizzie deep in the cave face to face with Fang!
Lizzie: I don't know who this guy is...but I don't like him!
Lizzie started barking ferociously, but Fang let out an even more ferocious roar. This scared Lizzie so much, she hid behind Tippy.
Lizzie: Please, don't eat me!
Fang: Oh, you aren't gonna worry about me doing that...yet!
Lizzie/Tippy: *gulp* Uh-oh...
Meanwhile, Belchic and Joey were still on the trail of their girlfriends' scent.
Joey: Do you have any idea where we are, Belchic?
Belchic: Not a clue. This is more confusing than that time I had to cross over that big pit.
Cut to flashback: Belchic is on one side of a seemingly bottomless pit. A series of blocks are appearing and disappearing before him.
Belchic: Okay...memorize the pattern...*a couple rounds, then...* I think I got it! *He starts to jump across the blocks and just before he gets to the last one, he misses and falls.* Son of a...*the "Mega Man" death sound plays*
End of flashback.
Belchic: Well, at least this adventure isn't quite as suicidal.
Just then, somebody approached them. It was Ember.
Ember: Hi, guys.
Joey: Ember! Nice to see you!
Ember: Have you guys heard the news?
Belchic: Sure have.
Joey: News? What news?
Belchic: Tippy and Lizzie?
Joey: Oh, yeah, yeah, right, right.
Ember: I'm assuming you guys are looking for them?
Belchic: Of course.
Ember: Think I can tag along?
Joey: Well, I guess we can ue some help.
Ember: Cool! I'll bet you I can save you some time too!
Joey: Really? How?
Ember: Ahem...*She stood before Belchic and Joey as if she were offering them a ride.* Get on.
Joey: Oh, thanks!
So, Joey and Belchic got on Ember's back.
Belchic: Let's go!
And off they went.
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To be continued...
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Post by LoneWanderer Raiden on Oct 5, 2008 0:42:00 GMT -5
Ya know, Belch... it's not because people are losing interest. Atleast not me anyway. I could sit here and stay on here all day, and make replys to every single post/thread.... but I'm very busy, especially on the weekend. I work, I have a job 12 hours a day on the weekend and college throughout the week. Ahem, sorry but I felt like I had to explain myself. Please don't mistake me for getting upset with you. I'm not. But yeah, just try to be bit more patient. Someone will eventually reply. Other than that, great fic, man. Keep it up. ^^
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Post by Belchic on Oct 9, 2008 1:58:49 GMT -5
Just want to inform you guys that I've got a lot of ideas in my head for this fic. The problem is putting them all together. I'll try to get a new chapter up soon.
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Post by Drake on Oct 9, 2008 2:10:44 GMT -5
And, um, tell me, why is Ember offering anyone a ride? Considering the fact that's not one thing she does, nor jump into wanting to go for danger like that, since she would rather stay away from it.
So, unless you know how to use my characters in a fic, please, refrain from using them.
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