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Post by Shadow Dearly on Feb 18, 2010 19:56:01 GMT -5
Okay I have another poem here. Now, this poem is about Team Aurora, the team created by Cuddly and I in our rp. Now the team is non canon, so you don't have to worry about it. Cuddly, Shadow, and Smiley canon-wise, are good guys. So without further ado, I present to you my newest poem.
“Team Aurora”
All non-Dalmatians out there be beware
For we are coming to get you
So go to your pesky homes
And quiver in fear in the might known as Team Aurora
We are known throughout the galaxy
In the fight for Dalmatian domination
For the ones who oppose us
Prepare to meet your deadly demise
For the ones who betray us
Prepare to receive eternal punishment
Black and Blue the honorable colors
Are there to bring fear in your hearts
In our eyes we see a world
A world ruled by Dalmatians
Dalmatians as your dictators
Led by the honorable Cuddly, Smiley, and Shadow
But if by any chance we are defeated
Go ahead have your celebration and your cheers
It won’t be long
Until the mighty Team Aurora rises again
Hope you like it =3
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Post by Cuddly Dearly on Feb 19, 2010 9:56:00 GMT -5
Wow!! So powerful and scary but cool, better than "Dalmatian Domination" poem written by me I love it
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Post by Shadow Dearly on Feb 19, 2010 9:57:37 GMT -5
Thank You Cuddly ^^ I'm glad you like my poem =3
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Post by babclayman on Feb 19, 2010 10:26:53 GMT -5
Ah, A poem of the Evil Master Team we know as Aurora =P
Looks pretty good, but i think you might need to check the grammer of this line...
"Are there the bring fear in your hearts"
What does that mean exactly, or was it a typo?
Still, looks sinister and no one seems is to ever stop them =P
Good work ;3
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Post by Shadow Dearly on Feb 19, 2010 10:31:06 GMT -5
oh yeah, it was a typo. Thanks for pointing that out Bab^^. Glad you like the poem.
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Post by Shadow Dearly on Feb 19, 2010 10:58:03 GMT -5
Okay, here's a new poem from me. It was requestd by Paws. It's about her character Appette. I will work on the poem about her other character Josh and post it later. But now, here you go.
“Appette”
On a farm known as the Dearly farm
Lies a future friend of mine
Her name is Appette and she is cute
She is a sweetheart
But she is not in the Sweetheart Squad yet
The squad would welcome her with kindness
In my eyes I see the adventures that we are going to share
She loves puppies
So I have a shot of gaining her as a friend
We share some characteristics
Like we are both sensitive
I’m sure that we will be good friends
If we quarrel, we’ll find a solution
If our friends quarrel, we’ll help them
I’m sure that Appette will accept my fetish
Even though it would sound weird to her
When I have trouble finding Appette
I ask either Sneezy or Stickdip
Because Appette usually hangs out with them
I’m sure of it when I meet Appette
We would become fast friends
Enjoy =3
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Post by Paws on Feb 19, 2010 15:21:55 GMT -5
I love it. Thank you!
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Post by Shadow Dearly on Feb 19, 2010 15:30:29 GMT -5
You're welcome Paws =3
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Post by Shadow Dearly on Mar 2, 2010 20:11:22 GMT -5
Okay, it's been a loooooong time since I last updated my poem section. So I guess I show you 2 of my new poems. Okay the first one came from a rp I had with Belchic. In it Shadow broke up with Rosalina and Belchic and Tippy helped Shadow win back Rosalina. So here's the poem =3 "Shadow's Apology to Rosalina"My dearest Rosalina wherever you may be
Let this poem tell you how much I am sorry
You are my soul mate
I feel purified when you are around
Us breaking up
Felt like a bloody knife piercing our skin
All the times we've spent together
Were the happiest times of my life
If our relationship ends
My heart would break into a billion pieces
All our friends at the Dearly farm
Said that we were the perfect couple
And I want us to continue to be one
If our relationship ended
I would have a never ending hole in my heart
Rosalina, my darling
I cherish you with all my heart and soul
Your long blonde hair
Lights up the darkness within me
Your feet and toes
Are my laugh targets for you
Let our relationship never end
'cause you are the one for me The second poem is about Gary Stus. We know sometimes we go overboard in creating new fancharacters we accidentally make them gary stus or mary sues. Thankfully we have friends who help us fix our characters. This poem does not persuade you to change your characters and Nemo and I wrote this poem. ^^ Enjoy =3 "Gary Stus"Why do people create Gary Stus
Are they hooked on them? Do they like them?
Gary Stus are hated by everyone
Hated like the bitter cold
We want 'em to go away, but they just won't
They just keep coming back haunting us
People who create Gary Stus
Have no originality
They give their characters powers or copy
This never works for us
Someday I hope they'll learn from their mistakes and create a non-stu character
One that doesn't have powers
One that wasn't made in a laboratory
But until then, we wait in secret waiting for the stus to go Enjoy my new poems
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Post by babclayman on Mar 5, 2010 5:16:31 GMT -5
Awwww, the Rosalina poem looks sad. =s Still, at least She & Shadow were able to get back together in your RP. ;3
The Mary Sue/ Gary Stu poem is pretty good too, quite accurate to what they're like. We all feel that way about them don't we? =3
Nice work Shadow ;3 Looking forward for more. X3
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Post by Nemo on Mar 5, 2010 7:24:27 GMT -5
Good poems
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Post by Shadow Dearly on Mar 5, 2010 7:27:24 GMT -5
Thanks Bab and Nemo ^^ Nemo, thanks for helping with the Gary Stu poem
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Post by Cuddly Dearly on Mar 6, 2010 4:26:54 GMT -5
Really good poems, Shadow Speaking of Gary Stus, I don't hate them soooooo much, they can be annoying sometimes, but it's not so important for me. What I really dislike is DIGRESSING from the main topic of Disney's "101 Dalmatians", and it's very frequent on this forum. And well, it's often related to the Gary Stu characters
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Post by Shadow Dearly on Mar 6, 2010 8:12:34 GMT -5
Thank You Cuddly ^^ =3
Well, yeah. This is a fan board to 101 Dalmatians, not a fan board to Gary Stus and Mary Sues. We try to help our members tweak their OCs so they can get out of Stu or Sue status. Yeah Cuddly, that gets on my nerves as well.
Again, thanks for liking my poems =3
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Post by babclayman on Mar 6, 2010 8:50:52 GMT -5
I think what Cuddly meant by that was; "The Gary Stus/Mary Sues stealing elements from other things makes it look like a completely different show." is what he finds annoying. I can agree with him, like with the Avenger fic, when he put in the Star Wars part, i was thinking "Where does this come into "101 Dalmatians"?"
But still, it is a nice poem and i look forward to more Shadow. X3
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